Thank you for mentioning this, anon. I probably wouldn't have noticed it on my own.

In terms of the actual content on the page, that is much better than what was there before (including the first revision).

I'm still uncomfortable with the author response as-written on this and the next page, but like you said, the fact that this page was revised again is a good sign, as it suggests that she sat down and gave some serious thought to what people were saying about it.